Hello people!
I posted the 17th and possibly second last chapter. So as usual, I will post review responses. Let's do it!
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Review Responses Corner
(look at page) Wow... I got 6 reviews. I feel loved...
Foxyjosh: Yup, Sparky's a daddy. (glare at Sparky) You're better be a good daddy...
RodonAshby: Hmm... normally, I would be enjoyed, but since you removed your favorite on FB... hmm... (retain frustration and force a smile) Yeah! My story is cool, I know. You are not the first person to say that, but probably the first to say it with so much energy and enthousiasm! you are also the first one to openly say you like Rick. You are a girl, aren't you? ... Jusy saying. About grammar mistakes, there are a few but some people have an eye for it and others not. I would say that you are the later. But since it gets me praises, I won't complain.
P.S.: You don't need that suit. People here can understand, they are not stupid or racist... well... I hope they are not. (is a light-brown skinned French-Canadien with half Italian blood)
Hellkat: If Sparky gets in trouble for adopting that pichu, then I think Strongclaw would need a beating. I would make sure it happens. And I would like to see them train, too... hmm...
ShadowBlueShane: It's nice to know that you like my story even more than last time you said you do. Is your guess right... I guess you will have to see in this chapter.
AltoGuardian: Yup. I told you to wait until 16 was out before complaining, didn't I? So there you see it: Rick isn't completely bad. If you want to complain about someone else, I think you could complain about Strongclaw. He isn't always nice either. Electricity isn't a steady glow? There goes my theory... oh well... it still mostly works.
Yeah... Rick cares about children. He needed one thing to help him and it was that. Good thing the pichu was there. Speaking of pichu... yeah, my theory about pichu being killed is pretty much illogical. But, like you said, it makes the story go foward and I didn't feel like rewritting it once I did realize that my theory was wrong.
Finally... that thing about pokemon not being intelligent. Well, this is something that was mentioned once, way back in chapter 1. Remember when he was walking on the road home and thinking about pokemon being intelligent and potentially dangerous? Yeah. That was his philosophy, his goal... enough of a reason to be stunned when it turns out not to be true.
Kirby: (leave)
Psywave: (smirks) Hello, Kirb. Long time no see. I miss torturing your mind. Fortunately, my daughter is there for it, now. And she does it very well. Now, it seems that I have to review your insignificant little message. Whatever... Rick should have participated, but the weakling never listen to the voice of reason, that's it, mine. Strongclaw is perfect like he is. Pikachu don't need to be any different than that. He's not going to go around and dance like a moron, will he? Nope. He has some decency, unlike someone I know. (glare at the trapped Rick in his head)
Killing not being ethical? You humans and your feelings... if a pichu is weak, he should die. There, no more discussion about that. Yeah... you are very slow. Humans aren't cool, are they? Always doing stuff bothering everyone who actually matters.
(shocks you) Stop mocking my beautiful language! (shocks you again) Those sounds taste like seeds and it's not your problem! (pouts) I hope that the narrator is insulting Rick! That human is always doing things wrong! Grrr...
P.S.: (retains DPL from punching you to death)
P.P.S.: Pikachu are much better than eevee.
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There... I'm done.
Ciao!
-DPL
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[RodonAshby]: Unless I'm rather confused - I'm a he, but meh, not like I state anywhere. *shrugs* I spot the grammar mistakes, I only point out/include ones that change a meaning or create something unintentionally, and don't review as I read therefore 'they're not memorable' - I'm a British 'grammar nazi' at heart who reads fanfiction at 2AM or so, usually later. *laughs*
Don't worry Rodon. Me and Ricky just seem to assume that everyone on FF.net is female... I do it more often, but that's probably because my mind is apparently half-female anyways... Er... Anyways...
When did Psywave mess with my mind?
[RodonAshby]: *Worries for no reason* Oh, wait...
Moving on...!
[RodonAshby]: (Shoot me for the 3 out of 4 comments so far!.. Remembered something, cough) About the noticing grammar - an example would be that I wouldn't mention "later" instead of "latter" being used like in the post, but "Warming" instead of "Warning" creates a different image (as written near the end of chapter 17 of 'SC'). I guess also it could be that I reed from the wii, because I'm lazy and get to lay in bed at 2AM reading things etc, that I don't mention grammar as it has no 'flowing' impact for me. *insert nervous twitch here for no reason*.
P.S. Reeds are awesome, why I have no idea, but they obviously are!
Things like that happens... and sadly, my eyes can miss it and Word definitely misses it. It's sad like that.
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