Last review responses ever... for Fractured Bond.

Hello everyone.

First thing comes first so... I hate this new keyboard. It makes me miss more key than every before and it plain sucks. So if you see even more typo, blame the keyboard, not me. Now, if anyone want to say anything more about Fractured Bond or discuss the end of Sparking Chaos, there won't be anymore place than comments to this entry. I doubt anyone will want to say anything, but I'm free to reply to anything related to that. So... happy commenting.

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Kagai's review responses

Kirby: Jen is dead? Really? I didn't think she was, she's just lost in that bad place. It's sad. I like Jenee a lot too. She's like Jen a bit... it's been so long since I last saw her... Sparky said she's dead, but I never understood why he said that. I think he just wants to make me sad. He's mean. I put as much effort at being myself, but Ricky isn't really a good writer. I think he sucks. (grins) he must be so mad right now. I think it was a great story too. I still wonder what happened to Jen... I guess I will never know... bye, Kirb!

-Kagai

P.S.: (growl to make you move away from Jenee and nuzzle her)

P.P.S.: It would have been funnier if Jen was there to laugh too...
P.P.P.S: What?

Foxyjosh: I was sad too. Hope to see you again one day! (grin)

Rodon Ashby: The ending wasn't ruined. Don't you think having a kit is a great thing? Sure, I'm very sad because Jen is gone somewhere and I never got to see her again, but she taught me a lot of things and if I see her again one day, I will tell her how much she helped me. (smile) Don't be sad... everything is not perfect, but I liked how it turned out. Other people seem too. 

As for the writing, I never wrote anything, but Ricky seemed sad when he wrote it. I think it was because he wrote sad things, but I could be wrong. Maybe he did write a lot of nice things with nice words. Maybe he is not a bad writer. He did give me a daughter. (smile again) I hoped that you still liked the story. See you again soon in Sparking Chaos!

P.S.: Hehe... shocking things is Sparky's department.

P.P.S.: It's ok... sometime I'm sad too. We can't always like everything. I sure don't like Sparky. But the important is to like things as a whole for what they are. Pikachu make good food, for exemple...

Ampere: Yeah... I'm sad that Jen is gone too. Everyone seems sad. It's saddening me. I will have a moment of silence, for her. (have a moment of silence) Done... I hope to see you again some time.

AltoGuardian: Why does everyone keeps telling me Jen is dead? I feel like people know something I don't. It's making me feel paranoid. Are people hiding something from me? I hope not, since I have been so nice to them for a while. If Sparky is lost, I don't care, but I don't want the humans in black to win. They are scaring me and I'm sure they would scare my daughter if she saw them. (read the "forgive" part, despite not being able to read. Plot hole?) Hehe... I think that was one of those mistakes with words Ricky often do. Like that time with warm instead of warn. They are funny. (laugh at me) Good to see you like to read about me. I hope to see you again in SC soon! (tail wave)

P.S.: That is very sad.

JonseyCat79: Thanks for feeling the emotion Ricky put into that story. It's not always fun to tell sad things, but someone had to say them. Thanks for believing in me and Jen, too. I like it when people believe in me, because it gives me more courage to raise my daughter alone. My mate was... well... I'd rather not talk about that. Bye!

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This is done! Finally, it took me 5 weeks, but I did it. I'm so cool. Oh well... it was nice to write that story and now I will focus on finishing Sparking Chaos. That thing needs another proper ending.

Ciao!

-DPL

Chapter 17 of Sparking Chaos posted!

Hello people!

I posted the 17th and possibly second last chapter. So as usual, I will post review responses. Let's do it!

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Review Responses Corner

(look at page) Wow... I got 6 reviews. I feel loved...

Foxyjosh: Yup, Sparky's a daddy. (glare at Sparky) You're better be a good daddy...

RodonAshby: Hmm... normally, I would be enjoyed, but since you removed your favorite on FB... hmm... (retain frustration and force a smile) Yeah! My story is cool, I know. You are not the first person to say that, but probably the first to say it with so much energy and enthousiasm! you are also the first one to openly say you like Rick. You are a girl, aren't you? ... Jusy saying. About grammar mistakes, there are a few but some people have an eye for it and others not. I would say that you are the later. But since it gets me praises, I won't complain.

P.S.: You don't need that suit. People here can understand, they are not stupid or racist... well... I hope they are not. (is a light-brown skinned French-Canadien with half Italian blood)

Hellkat: If Sparky gets in trouble for adopting that pichu, then I think Strongclaw would need a beating. I would make sure it happens. And I would like to see them train, too... hmm...

ShadowBlueShane: It's nice to know that you like my story even more than last time you said you do. Is your guess right... I guess you will have to see in this chapter.

AltoGuardian: Yup. I told you to wait until 16 was out before complaining, didn't I? So there you see it: Rick isn't completely bad. If you want to complain about someone else, I think you could complain about Strongclaw. He isn't always nice either. Electricity isn't a steady glow? There goes my theory... oh well... it still mostly works.

Yeah... Rick cares about children. He needed one thing to help him and it was that. Good thing the pichu was there. Speaking of pichu... yeah, my theory about pichu being killed is pretty much illogical. But, like you said, it makes the story go foward and I didn't feel like rewritting it once I did realize that my theory was wrong.

Finally... that thing about pokemon not being intelligent. Well, this is something that was mentioned once, way back in chapter 1. Remember when he was walking on the road home and thinking about pokemon being intelligent and potentially dangerous? Yeah. That was his philosophy, his goal... enough of a reason to be stunned when it turns out not to be true.

Kirby: (leave)
Psywave: (smirks) Hello, Kirb. Long time no see. I miss torturing your mind. Fortunately, my daughter is there for it, now. And she does it very well. Now, it seems that I have to review your insignificant little message. Whatever... Rick should have participated, but the weakling never listen to the voice of reason, that's it, mine. Strongclaw is perfect like he is. Pikachu don't need to be any different than that. He's not going to go around and dance like a moron, will he? Nope. He has some decency, unlike someone I know. (glare at the trapped Rick in his head)

Killing not being ethical? You humans and your feelings... if a pichu is weak, he should die. There, no more discussion about that. Yeah... you are very slow. Humans aren't cool, are they? Always doing stuff bothering everyone who actually matters.

(shocks you) Stop mocking my beautiful language! (shocks you again) Those sounds taste like seeds and it's not your problem! (pouts) I hope that the narrator is insulting Rick! That human is always doing things wrong! Grrr...

P.S.: (retains DPL from punching you to death)
P.P.S.: Pikachu are much better than eevee.

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There... I'm done.

Ciao!

-DPL

Last chapter of Fractured Bond posted...

Hello...

I posted the last chapter... not feeling well... whatever... review response time... the responses for the last chapter will be out Friday, on this blog.

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Kagai's Review Response Corner.

RodonAshby: Yeah... Jen is great. I miss her. I still don't know where she is. Thanks for saying the chapter was great. DPL appreciate it.

AltoGuardian: Half eaten Jen? You saw her? Where is she? I want to see her... Oh... it is nice to be out of this place, though...

Foxyjosh: Yeah... but this one is even shorter.

Kirby: I'm not hurting Jen, I'm eating a pikachu! Psh... of course Jen is better than Sparky. She's better than anything else. I wonder why everyone keeps calling her a pikachu. It's annoying. I hope to Jen out of something too, because she's not out there with me. Where are you, Jen?

P.S.: ...(grooms the eevee)
P.P.S.: Yeah... (bite you)
P.P.P.S.: Jen: (smiles at the petting)

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It's done. Enjoy the chapter!

Ciao!

-DPL

P.S.: Sorry about the crappy responses... I'm not feeling it.

Back to work tomorrow.

Hello

Tomorrow will be the first day of work for my new internship. It should be a day filled with waste of time and stuff. Government, office and first day of work together sure imply a lot of it. I may have time to work more on my last chapter tomorrow. I did some today, but not that much. It's hard stuff to write about. There's pain and stuff. It's lacking joy. I hope there will be more later.

Oh, well. Ciao!

-DPL

Chapter 7 of Fractured Bond posted!

Hello everyone!

The seventh chapter is posted and I think this one is cool, despite it's small size. Next chapter is probably going to be the last, but is going to be longer, soooo... <_< Review Responses!

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Kagai's Review Response Corner

Foxyjosh: (look down sadly) Yes... my best friend is lost... poor Sunny... (sniff)

RodonAshby: It's fun that you like to read about me. You are lucky that DPL cut all the parts were I sad and hungry... and sad. It's fun to have a new friend to talk to though, because I lost all of mine because of that evil meat.

AltoGuardian: I don't know much, but if I was evil or I was an evil pokemon, I would attacks humans to scare them off. Scared humans are more easy to control. I think... I never scared a human... but I'm trying my best to. I don't know what it is they shot me with, with it made me sleepy. I don't like forced sleep. It seems forced.

Kirby: People says lies about me? ...but... that's mean! I'm so going to bite them for that! If I could... I have no idea where I am now. I hope I can survive too. (sniff) Oh... I think I smell food.
DPL: They are under the same commander because they are the only projects worked on in that overtaken military base and the general was supervising the operations there and things do have to look normal from the outside. It's still seen as being the army, after all.

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There, it's done. Enjoy your reading!

Ciao!

-DPL

Writer block

Hello

I started writing chapter 7 today and I blocked after 400 words. Apparently, my mind forgot about a little detail and now Jen is doomed to be killed by her pokemon and there is nothing I can do without going out of character. The Rockets will have won... but of course, I can't allow that... so I will have to dig into every way the scene can go and find the less lethal way out of this little problem. Of course, it means no chapter today and maybe none tomorrow, if I don't find a solution quick enough. You can blame my lack of forethought. Sorry.

Ciao.

-DPL

EDIT: After nearly one hour of brainstorming, I finally have found some kind of so-so solution worthy of a spy movie. It works in-character, but it's kind of a lucky shot. Oh well... it won't help Jen's reputation of being a perfect character, but at least it will save her life... not her perfect health, though... oh well... now those 4 days are finally going to have an use. Damn... all this thinking drained my energy...

Chapter 16 of Sparking Chaos posted!

Hello again everyone (for the third time today)

I'm out of words to say, so let's have the review responses right now. I wonder if Sparky should do those, since Kagai is doing the other ones...

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Review Response Corner!

HelKat: Well, maybe this chapter will tell where I am going... or probably not. But, if you want to know what happens to Jen, I posted a new story called Fractured Bond talking about it. Maybe you don't know, since I didn't see you review there. Oh well... if you didn't know, now you do!

Foxyjosh: Wow... that was a meaningful comment. Well, if you insist, first of all, Sparky is going to be killed by the evil squirrels living inside the Big Tree. Then, Strongclaw will rise to power and conquer the pokeworld. But, in the darkest times, a hero named Kagai will appear and overthrow Strongclaw to bring peace to the pokeworld. And she will eat him. The end.

Kirby: I knew about the genetic diversity thing, but I forgot to talk about it. Sue me. (read the rest) Yeah, it's an established fact by now that Sparky sucks. I think I will write it somewhere obvious. Sparky is based on me? Damn, it means I'm selfish, egocentrical and a dirtbag... oh wait, that's what I am! I can be generous and kind, too... (point at Jen) Lovely is something I added to her, though. I don't have that. Well... I hope not. I would freak out if someone called me lovely.

PS: You have FB now for eevee... well... had.
PPS: Hey... you have read about Kagai and Jen! Cheers up!

Altoguardian: You know, I love to reply to reviews, but seven in a row drain someone, I tell you. About Rick being eaten, I could have that in the deleted scenes, but some scenes in that set are inapropriate for kids. I must thank you back for not ranting about Rick... much. Dr. Evil is not evil anymore, though... Being in a colony won't help Kagai and Jen. They can do it themselves, probably. Sparky's case is a bit special, when it comes to mind and human memories.. you will see soon. As to your questions, it has been only 10-11 days. I blame my slow posting. Thanks for the review!

PS: You wanted Jen, you got her.

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Phew... I'm done... it took some time... Enjoy this chapter! The next one is coming Monday, since FB is going to finish soon and allows me to go with the rest of this unspoiled.

Ciao!

-DPL