Sunday, August 31, 2008

Chapter 7 of Fractured Bond posted!

Hello everyone!

The seventh chapter is posted and I think this one is cool, despite it's small size. Next chapter is probably going to be the last, but is going to be longer, soooo... <_< Review Responses!

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Kagai's Review Response Corner

Foxyjosh: (look down sadly) Yes... my best friend is lost... poor Sunny... (sniff)

RodonAshby: It's fun that you like to read about me. You are lucky that DPL cut all the parts were I sad and hungry... and sad. It's fun to have a new friend to talk to though, because I lost all of mine because of that evil meat.

AltoGuardian: I don't know much, but if I was evil or I was an evil pokemon, I would attacks humans to scare them off. Scared humans are more easy to control. I think... I never scared a human... but I'm trying my best to. I don't know what it is they shot me with, with it made me sleepy. I don't like forced sleep. It seems forced.

Kirby: People says lies about me? ...but... that's mean! I'm so going to bite them for that! If I could... I have no idea where I am now. I hope I can survive too. (sniff) Oh... I think I smell food.
DPL: They are under the same commander because they are the only projects worked on in that overtaken military base and the general was supervising the operations there and things do have to look normal from the outside. It's still seen as being the army, after all.

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There, it's done. Enjoy your reading!

Ciao!

-DPL

Saturday, August 30, 2008

Writer block

Hello

I started writing chapter 7 today and I blocked after 400 words. Apparently, my mind forgot about a little detail and now Jen is doomed to be killed by her pokemon and there is nothing I can do without going out of character. The Rockets will have won... but of course, I can't allow that... so I will have to dig into every way the scene can go and find the less lethal way out of this little problem. Of course, it means no chapter today and maybe none tomorrow, if I don't find a solution quick enough. You can blame my lack of forethought. Sorry.

Ciao.

-DPL

EDIT: After nearly one hour of brainstorming, I finally have found some kind of so-so solution worthy of a spy movie. It works in-character, but it's kind of a lucky shot. Oh well... it won't help Jen's reputation of being a perfect character, but at least it will save her life... not her perfect health, though... oh well... now those 4 days are finally going to have an use. Damn... all this thinking drained my energy...

Friday, August 29, 2008

Chapter 16 of Sparking Chaos posted!

Hello again everyone (for the third time today)

I'm out of words to say, so let's have the review responses right now. I wonder if Sparky should do those, since Kagai is doing the other ones...

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Review Response Corner!

HelKat: Well, maybe this chapter will tell where I am going... or probably not. But, if you want to know what happens to Jen, I posted a new story called Fractured Bond talking about it. Maybe you don't know, since I didn't see you review there. Oh well... if you didn't know, now you do!

Foxyjosh: Wow... that was a meaningful comment. Well, if you insist, first of all, Sparky is going to be killed by the evil squirrels living inside the Big Tree. Then, Strongclaw will rise to power and conquer the pokeworld. But, in the darkest times, a hero named Kagai will appear and overthrow Strongclaw to bring peace to the pokeworld. And she will eat him. The end.

Kirby: I knew about the genetic diversity thing, but I forgot to talk about it. Sue me. (read the rest) Yeah, it's an established fact by now that Sparky sucks. I think I will write it somewhere obvious. Sparky is based on me? Damn, it means I'm selfish, egocentrical and a dirtbag... oh wait, that's what I am! I can be generous and kind, too... (point at Jen) Lovely is something I added to her, though. I don't have that. Well... I hope not. I would freak out if someone called me lovely.

PS: You have FB now for eevee... well... had.
PPS: Hey... you have read about Kagai and Jen! Cheers up!

Altoguardian: You know, I love to reply to reviews, but seven in a row drain someone, I tell you. About Rick being eaten, I could have that in the deleted scenes, but some scenes in that set are inapropriate for kids. I must thank you back for not ranting about Rick... much. Dr. Evil is not evil anymore, though... Being in a colony won't help Kagai and Jen. They can do it themselves, probably. Sparky's case is a bit special, when it comes to mind and human memories.. you will see soon. As to your questions, it has been only 10-11 days. I blame my slow posting. Thanks for the review!

PS: You wanted Jen, you got her.

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Phew... I'm done... it took some time... Enjoy this chapter! The next one is coming Monday, since FB is going to finish soon and allows me to go with the rest of this unspoiled.

Ciao!

-DPL

Chapter 6 of Fractured Bond posted!

Hello everyone!

I just posted the sixth chapter of Fractured Bond. I won't post the seventh too like I said yesterday, for two reasons:

1. It's too much to read with the newest chapter of Sparking Chaos coming up in a few minutes.
2. I didn't write it and I don't plan to write anything today.

So, let's read the review responses together!

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Kagai's Review Responses corner!

Foxyjosh: The army captured it, but it was for Team Rocket (they didn't know, though) TR is using the military to get the tech from Bill, so their machine can't be better than Bill. It can only be worse. They are a gang of lazy bums. (Kagai pushes me away and takes control of the response) Hey, they are my responses. Hum... there is nothing left to reply too... awww... (bite DPL)

Kirby: Hi, Kirb! DPL stole a response, but I get this one and I intent to keep it. (growl at DPL) Though, there's little to reply too. I told DPL that I couldn't recognize Jen. I told him ten times! But no, he didn't listen. I punished him good for that, don't worry. He's not laughing as much now that he is not allowed to visit my stomach during a whole week.

PS: It's ok. At least, he is being punished.
PPS: (blink) Yes... so?
PPPS: Oran is weird now, I have to admit. I don't like him anymore. (pout)

AltoGuardian: Jen is much better. I miss her so much. I want to see her again! (cry) Oh... I'm more inteligent! Thanks! Take that, rat! (bite Sparky) yeah... that meat is scaring me. I don't want to eat that anymore! Bad! Stupid meat! (spit on it) Spelling... bah... oh, meat! (eat it)

With love, Kagai

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That's it for Kagai's response. Kagai, stop eating that meat! (run after her)

Robotic voice replacing me: Ci-a-o.

Back to the nest!

This post has nothing to do with my story, so anyone reading this (which is only Kirb, apparently) who doesn't care about stuff, don't read (and since it's Kirb, he will read it, so that warning is useless. Yay common sense!)

At long last, I left Dial-Up Kingdom to be back into the world of normal Internet connection. This is a day of great celebration! (celebrate)

Well... it seems that I had nothing more to say... or I forgot... so much for the warning... (shrug)

Ciao!

Thursday, August 28, 2008

No Chapter tonight

Sorry people...

My chapter is ready, but my computer is being evil and is refusing the USB drive on the last day I actually need it, so I can't get my chapter out of it. So, I will post it when I will be back to my dorm tomorrow, along with tomorrow's chapter (7) and the weekly new chapter of Sparking Chaos (16). So, you will have three chapters for the price of one tomorrow. They will be posted late, though... sorry about that too...

Ciao!

-DPL

Wednesday, August 27, 2008

Chapter 5 of Fractured Bond posted!

Hello!

Yet another chapter from me today. You people will be sad when my vaction will be over in a few days. Until then...

I have to admit that I have a bad feeling about this chapter. I don't know... maybe my writting is not par to what I offered before or maybe it is the typos (even if I checked it twice). I am happy with the content, but... I dunno... something feels weird. Oh well... readers will be the judges in the end.

Now for the review responses!

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Kagai's Review Response Corner

Kirby: ... What kind of review is that? Bad Kirb! (bite you)

Foxyjosh: Event turned? Wow... That must be a pretty thing to see. Prettier than the things I see in here.

Kirby: Again? Oh... that's a better review. Now I'm happy! (smile) I'm going to let you see Oran, like you wanted too. (Oran walks in and waits for petting. I groom him) Now... Oh... it's called Lost Review... I wonder why... I'm sure you did that on purpose, you crazy eevee-fan. (bite you) Who is sounding like who? You are confusing. And Rocket uniform? Is someone eventually going to tell me what a Rocket is? It's confusing... Jen can't be confused by the name, because she doesn't care about the human, only the pikachu. I only care the chu too. He was tasty looking.

That guy seemed evil. I never met him, but by judging on what you said, I would probably want to kill him if he was trapped in the same room as me. (sharpen her claws) Oh... if she was an eevee, she would try to steal Oran away from me. (growl at Jen) Shoo! He's mine! Oh, speaking of Jen...
Jen: Aww... I love you too, Kirb! (accept the hug and kiss you)

PS: I guess I forgive you. Oran is there.

PPS: Jen: (accept this other hug and kiss you again) I will miss you... (go back to becoming a pikachu)

AltoGuardian: Jen is going to become a pikachu? Ohh... well... I heard she liked being eaten, so maybe she won't complain too much when I will kill her. I will go soft on her, I promise. If I see her, that's it. I don't know either where this is going to go, but we had good meat so far... but I dunno... Sunny and Oran have been acting strange... I hope it's nothing bad. DPl won't be able to update daily in a few days, but he will try one chapter every 2 or 3 days.

P.S.: I missed the mention of Rick. now, I have no pikachu to eat. (think about Jen) Hmm...

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Well, there you go. The review responses are gone. I think I'm lacking ending messages too... oh well, I will still have my trusty ciao. Ciao!

-DPL

Tuesday, August 26, 2008

Chapter 4 of Fractured Bond posted!

Hello again everyone!

A new chapter... again? Yep!

Here's the review responses. I would say more, but my time is limited.

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Kagai's Review Response Corner

Evvee: Now I remember why Es' is always saying that you like eevee too much. Now, I'm not so sure if I want to be an eevee again with someone like you around. (protect the eevee from you) Crazy human.

PS: I tried to make him put more effort on chapter 4, but I'm not sure I bit him enough times.

PPS: ... (hide the eevee away)

Foxyjosh: He won't give you any hint, but I can see it written here. It's... (DPL give me meat) Yay! (eat the meat)

AltoGuardian: The plants are fake? Everything looked real to me, except for the trees on the edge. I think DPL might have written things wrong again. Stupid master! (bite DPL) Hmm... (bite DPL again) Jen.... depressed? No... she's always happy and confident. I'm sure she will save me, no matter what she will be. You are right though, Sparky is mean. If I get my jaws on him...

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Well, That's all. Ciao.

-DPL

Monday, August 25, 2008

Chapter 3 of Fractured Bond Posted!

Hello again everyone!

Three chapters in three days? Am I crazy? Probably... but I don't think any reader will complain. Here's chapter 3 and I promise that there will be another one tomorrow. As for the review responses, I had so much fun tomorrow making Kagai answer one review that she will answer them all from now on. So, here's the new Kagai's Review Response Corner!

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Kagai's Review Response Corner

Foxyjosh: Oh, I hope Sunny will be alright. She's my best friend! If she's hurt, I will bite whoever did it to her!

Kirby: Hi again, Kirb. Look, I got a job. I feel bad about Jen, too. I wonder where she is and I miss her. She was nice to be with and she gave me nice food. Although, she was also protecting the rat... hmm... still, I hope she doesn't change too much too. I need her to provide me food and care again.

I thought I was cute too, but that hard thing tasted bad and didn't make me feel good. It made me sleepy too... I think... I don't really remember falling asleep... err... it was nice replying to you again, bye!

PS: (groom the eevee again)

AltoGuardian: Hi, guy who don't like Sparky. I think he is annoying and that he should be eaten too. By me, of course. I think we will have a fun time together. (look at the first part of the review) Military? Region? Mafia? I don't know what that stuff is, but if it hurts Jen, then it can't be good. I will try to find those things and bite them hard. That should teach them about hurting my trainer. If Sparky get involved, I will bite him too. If Jen had to become a pokemon, I would like her to be an umbreon. This way, I wouldn't be alone. Oh... I guess we will see together. Either way, she's still the best as food provider. Oh well... bye!

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That's all for Kagai's review responses. You did great, Kagai. (pet her) Talk to you again tomorrow, people! Ciao!

-DPL

Sunday, August 24, 2008

Chapter 2 of Fractured Bond posted.

Hello everyone!

I wrote and posted today the second chapter of this new little story. So, as usual, I will go with the infamous review responses.

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Review Response Corner

rainbow rose 13: Nice little account name you have there. I never saw the number 13 with rainbow before. It's cool. It's also cool that you think that the story is awesome. But what would be really cool would be that you still think the story is awasome in the end. That's the real cool stuff. Keep reading!

Kirby: Since this story is about Kagai and Jen and that you like Kagai so much, I decided to let Kagai respond for me.
Kagai: Hello, Kirb. (waves paw) Kilos... is that a kind of food? (I whisper something to her) Ah... I don't know what a Rockets is, but I never saw anything like that, so I have no idea what you are talking about. You should spend more time petting me instead of saying things I don't care about. Hmm... do I look like a map to know where stuff are? Also, I don't know this Oak, but I know that you are a nice one. I guess it makes up for it. DPL doesn't know how Viridian is spelled? That's not that bad, I don't even how to write my name. I don't even know how to write. (sees line about Arceus) Hey! Nobody makes fun of Arceus! He is holy! (bites you) Good to know that I am in a funny place, because last time I checked, I wasn't.

P.S.: I love to eat and bite stuff. Are story plans edible?

P.P.S: (grooms the eevee)

AltoGuardian: Well, now you got it. I had this in mind for a long time, but it was your ranting that convinced me to do it. Have fun with Jen and Kagai. They won't have that much fun, so someones need to have some for them. Thanks you and good luck with reading it, too!

Foxyjosh: Exciting? This is... GREAT!

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There you go! See you next chapter for another batch of Review Responses!

Ciao!

-DPL

Saturday, August 23, 2008

New... chapter? Nope... new story!

Hello, everyone.

Today I was bored, so I decided to write something I had in mind for a long time, back when I wrote chapter 14 months ago. I found it sad that Sparking Chaos doesn't talk much about what happened to Jen and Kagai, so this new story is there to fix that, as well as a few other things! I talked about those things in the author notes of the chapter, so I won't say anything more. It's called Fractured Bond. Have a nice day and reading!

Ciao!

Friday, August 22, 2008

Late post

I don't have anything to say today. I was supposed to have things to say about the chapter, but I don't feel like saying them. However, I received chapter 16 and 17, so I will post both of them, very soon. I think that they go together and since I made people wait months for new chapters, I think it's fair that I do a few gifts.

Ciao

Thursday, August 21, 2008

Chapter 15 posted!

Hi, everyone!

I just posted chapter 15, so go read it! This chapter is full of… well… it’s… kind of… I will be honest, this is the chapter where the less interesting stuff happens. I wouldn’t say this chapter is boring, but it serves its purpose: setting the stage for the rest of the story, in which each chapter is full of stuff and there are plot twists everywhere. Well, maybe not everywhere, but still, a lot of stuff happens. To make up for this, I promise that I will give you chapter 16 as soon I get it from Tyler. So, who knows, there might be another chapter in 2-3 days. Oh well… let’s cheer up the mood with Review Responses! Woo!

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Review Response Corner 2: The Return of the Responses!

Foxyjosh : Most likely, we will never get that answer. Or we may… I don’t really know, since I haven’t decided of that yet. But I can tell you that those soldiers are evil people doing evil stuff… I don’t like the army very much, so it kind of show in my story. Oh well… have fun with the next chapter!

AltoGuardian : Yay! I love long reviews! Watch out, Kirb, this guy may get the « reviewer of year 2008 » award! Ok… back into the topic. You are one of the people who voted for Rick as being the most evil character, aren’t you? If not, well, I’m sure you would have voted that. So… yeah… you pretty must got the gist of it. Jen, Kagai, sunny and the others are screwed and Sparktail isn’t going to help them. Yeah… if I hadn’t written the rest of the story and that Sparky wasn’t a part of me and a character I like I a lot, I would try to capture him too, though I would feed him to Kagai. It’s more efficient than just killing him.

Anyway… now Sparky is back as the main assh--- character and he is scared to death. Things are going pretty well for him. Hey, better than that, and he would be stuck by lightning and actually be injured. Though you can’t hut him, I allow you to fictionally hunt him in your head where his fictional death doesn’t affect the flow of the story. I would gladly roleplay that with you, but you would have to be into text roleplaying and we should have to share e-mails address and find a IM to RP on and that would be a lot of trouble. Though, I’m always open to new stuff, so my story e-mail address is sparktail@gmail.com. Yes, it’s that simple. So much that I also took sparktail@hotmail.com and sparktail@yahoo.com too (not sure about that one, though). Anyway, those e-mails are also good for anyone wanting to send Sparktail some e-mails to insult him or something. Just so people know.

I think I got a bit distracted here… where was I? Oh yeah… God knowing he needs to be better. Well, I guess it depends on which God you are talking about. Some would be happy about Sparky’s way of life. I don’t approve them, but it was important to mention. What’s next… hmm… oh, you can rant about Rick as long you want. The chu is so selfish he probably sees this as a praise, because someone is talking about him. I think those rants are funny, too, and they make me write long review responses, which I love! (hug response)

Alright… so now I reached the actual review! Aww… that’s the most boring part. I liked the beginning with the soldiers too, but I think I might have been a bit flawed. It wasn’t as serious as I wanted it to be. Kagai talking about eating Rick is kind of a running gag of mine. Well... in truth, it’s more than a gag to me, but well… I love seeing stuff being eaten and.. er… oh look, I’m changing the subject! This response is now about how confusing Sparky can be! I will admit (again, I think) that his dreams and his animal logic are a bit… weird, if not even lacking common sense, but that’s mostly because his logic is screwed (the rest is my inability to clearly explain something that isn’t obvious).

Thanks for saying that my chapter was good! I appreciate your constructive comments and your rants! Really, I should really work on giving you something. Maybe preview of chapters before anyone else? That would be cool. Or I could give you a cookie. Those are plentiful on the Internet. Oh and, it’s ok if you do atrociously long chapters, because I do atrociously long reviews responses and chapters, so it’s all good. Have fun reading chapter 15! (or have fun waiting for 16, if you have read 15 already.)

P.S.: Wow, that must be my longest review response ever! Yay!

Kira: Hi, Kira! I missed ya! There has been that weirdo reviewing chapter 13 and it freaked me out. It’s a good thing that freak is gone. He scared poor little Sparky. He missed ya, too. Umm… so, a lot happened? Wait until you see chapter 17 or 18 (I don’t remember which one. Maybe it’s both), a lot happen in them. Actually, a lot happen after the beginning of the chapter 17, because the main point of the story is resolved there and the rest is a mix of good, bad, sad and funny stuff, in no particular order. Well, it’s pretty much the same as before, but with slightly more fun. That little mention about Jen moving in her sleep did come from our RP, since that’s where it became part of the character. Sparky left, yes, but he wouldn’t have been able to do anything against the guns anyway, neither would have a fully awake Kagai. A bullet is faster than any pokémon. (those were darts, but you get the point) We will see what happens with Sparky soon… like… in this chapter! Whoo! Thanks for the review!

P.S.: Watch out for the guy above you! I think he is trying to do stuff…

Tyler: OMG! You are in the past! You are kind of time-traveled and stuff! Wow! I’m all impressed! I think Sparky is being more and more pikachu each chapter. I tried to tell him, but he was pouting because I didn’t give him his berry and he wouldn’t listen. This pikachu needs to be tamed, really. There will be some happiness down the road, just be more patient. It’s the key! (well actually, you will soon have all my chapters, so you will know before anyone else, but that’s the advantage of being my proofreader.) Have fun with the rest of the proofreading, though. How quick I post the last chapters depends on you!

ShadowBlueShane: Hi, new reviewer! It’s nice to see you. It’s nice to see any new reviewer. It gives me more inputs and happiness, but mostly happiness, because the story is done and there’s very little to input in it. 6 hours to read the whole thing? Wow, you are quick! (or maybe I am slow) Kagai and Sparky are my favorite characters, too. Well, I like Jen a lot, too. My favorite characters are, in order:

1. Sparktail
2. Jen and Kagai and Miya
3. Magic and Sunny and Amper and Shocky and… well… pretty much every character I created. I love them all! (hug all of them)

Sparktail got his story, since he is number one and Jen, Kagai and Miya might get their own mini-stories. I’m thinking about something right now for Jen and Kagai and I will try to write the first chapter of something as soon I’m done with revising the last chapters of Sparking Chaos. As for Miya… err… well… that’s my secret character. Who is she? Maybe one day people will know. Don’t tell anyone I told you this! It’s a secret! (try to hide this response behind a flower pot)

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Those… were long… but so much fun! (shed a tear) They were so great. It’s moving. Now, instead of doing like last chapter and posting post-chapter comments here, I will talk about it tomorrow, so it gives people some time to actually read the chapter (point at Kirby)

Ciao!

- DPL (aka Ricky, Sparky and that guy)

Wednesday, August 20, 2008

After the berries, comes the dentist

Good news everyone!

...I always wanted to say that. Now that this is behind us, let's get into the bulk of the subject. Today, I worked four hours in the berry field and I collected 2.25 buckets, which is better than the 1.70 yesterday morning. This means that I improved, I grown out of this experience and became a better man. Or a better Sparky, at the very least. I don't know if that's really better, when I look at the poll.

Anyway... I am kind of drifting away from the main topic. Which is... my story? Naw... today, I will talk about how I went to see the dentist. Now that's a real fun topic. There's a lot of danger, adventure and toothpaste! So, on the 20 minutes ride in car, I played with my DS. Then, my mom had her appointment, so there had been more DSness. Then, I had to wait a few more minutes, so I played some more. Finally, I went in that little room where they took a X-Ray snapshot of my mouth. Of course, X-Rays are dangerous, so I wore a heavy lead jacket. Riiight... so it's dangerous for my body, but not for my unprotected mouth, fraction of an inch away. Anyway... then, I went for the mouth cleaning itself. So, I waited for the woman to come by playing more DS. Waiting is a lot of fun with that thing in hands. Yeah, so the woman came and she used her fun water shooting thingy and her little vacuum thingy and scratched my teeth. It was a lot of fun and almost painless. Then, she used another pointy thing to clean between my teeth, which was a lot more painful, but not that much. Then, she polished my teeth with a turny thingy and that was funny too. Then she used the cord thing to clean between my teeth some more, then I had to have some stuff it my mouth to add fluor on my damaged teeth and make them stronger. At the end, the doctor came and contradicted himself, and I quote (translated from French): "You have 7 cavities, that's not pretty. You have very good teeth, though. I love to see that." Yay for dentists!

There you go, my first apppointment ever for a mouth cleaning, ever! I should more often than once every 21 years, but I am lazy. Hmm... since nobody is reading this when I'm not posting a chapter, I want to say to Kirb that I am sorry for getting mad this afternoon. I know I already said sorry, but you can never say it enough times. I loved the RP, how mild it was and Es', especially. She was very funny. She made we laugh and I actually facepalmed when Sparky did. Yeah... so that's what I had to say today.

Make fun, not war!

Ciao!

Tuesday, August 19, 2008

Berries!

Hello everyone.

Now that I am done with my story, I have to find something else to keep me busy. Since Sparky was a food gathered, in ye olde RP that gave birth to him, one year and half ago, what a better way of spending my time than doing like my hero and gathering berries a few hours a day?

Well... doing it voluntary and without being given any salary, of course! Yup... DPL collecting berries from bushes and refusing to be paid. This has to be seen to be believed. After doing it for 7 hours, I must admit that it had been a good exercise, so much that I am going there again tomorrow morning! Yay for generous offering of my time! I'm still slowly going to revise the four remainings chapters, on my free time. It's not like it's going to take a lot of my time compared to writing them.

That's all I had to say. Since I still have to get up very early tomorrow, I think I will take some time away from the Internet until tomorrow, to avoid a repeat of yesterday/night. Sorry Kirb, if you reply to our RPs later today, you won't get a reply until tomorrow. You had to do it earlier. Sorry again!

(give some of my berries to Sparky and Softpaw) Ciao!

Monday, August 18, 2008

Curtain fall

I woke up at 10:30AM today and 5 hours and 4135 words later, I have written the last word of my story. It's a tad under the minimal 5000 words each chapter, but when there is nothing more to say, it's time to end. I loved writing the ending and the very short epiloge. Now, I will sit here and feel proud... then I will go back to my daily routine of RPing like crazy, as soon I get some computer time (I'm posting while my sister is on the phone)

Will there be something after my story? I haven't decided yet. I will post the rest of the story and talk about my ideas as soon I can talk about them without spoiling the end of the story.

Ciao for now!

Sunday, August 17, 2008

More writtingness and food

Hello!

Today was my sister's birthday, so we went to a restaurant where you can eat everything you want, so I ate a lot again today. I think I took 4-5lbs in those two days. Oh well... it's all good. Other than that, I woke up late today and I worked on chapter 19. At this rate, I will finish it today, so I will start working on the last chapter tomorrow (and will likely complete it, as it might not even reach the minimal 5000 words)). It's making me all emotional and nostalgic, but that's because I'm an emotive person like that.

That's all I had to say. Back to writing. Ciao!

Saturday, August 16, 2008

Busy day

Hello everyone.

Today was a long and tiring day. I was waken up at 8AM after having gone to sleep at 3AM to roleplay with friends, so needless to say that I was tired. Then, I played with my DS in the car and in the store we went, since I didn't really anything to buy. At long last, I finished Mario and Luigi, Partners in Time! Hourra! Then, at 9:30AM, we went to mall and it was boring. We stayed there from 9:30AM to 5PM, so it wasn't that fun. To make things worse, we went to eat in a restaurant and I ate so much that I felt sick all afternoon. Oh well... I didn't buy anything for myself, but I paid 60$ for a graphic calculator for my soon-to-be-fifteen year old sister (her birthday is tomorrow), I bought Wii Fit to my mom (that 115$ hurt my wallet) and I gave 10$ to my brother so he would shut up at the restaurant, because he was making my mom go crazy. So yeah... I dare people to say I'm cheap!

On a more related note, I finished the proofreading of chapter 16 and I received the proofread version of chapter 15 today, so I could post it right now if I wanted to, but I prefer to wait a few days. Though, if somebody doesn't like Friday as being the posting day, I'm open to suggestions. Tomorrow, after celebrating my sister's birthday, I will start writting chapter 19. I'm not sure where I want to go from there, but I think I want to cut a lot of the stuff I had planned, because they just don't fit in the Rick-centered story. So, I might not reach 21 chapters like I had orignally planned and stop at 20. The end is near!!! Or is it?

Ciao!

Friday, August 15, 2008

Chapter 14 Posted!

Hello, everyone !

I posted chapter 14 today, it seems. So, like with every chapter, comes the mendatory review responses we all love and hug. Well, if you don’t, I sure do. I’ve made them all with love and hugged them before letting them go in the Whole Wild Web (yeah, I changed the acronym on purpose). So, here they are ! I even gave the section a nifty title.

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Review Response Corner !

HelKat: Yeah, Kagai is the coolest and bestest Umbreon ever ! Some people out there would make a website dedicated to her greatness. (glare at few friends of mine) . Seriously though, those espeons were meanies. I think that if Kagai sees them one day, she should throw a Shadow Ball at them, even if she technically can’t in my universe. It would be for lolz.

P.S. : I always wanted to say lolz.

Cathycalamitous : Thanks for your support and your nice words. Rick won’t become Ash’s pikachu though, or else that would be entering the land of cliche too much. I try to be original, even if some of my ideas are not. Oh well… I dunno if you will see this, since I those are reviews for earlier chapters and my blog wasn’t advertised back then, but I didn’t plan this eventually. Blame the plan.

Foxyjosh: A bird joining ? Do you want him dead or something ? Sometime, I wonder if Rick is liked… hmmm… (think about all the times he acted like an ass) mmm… maybe he kinda deserves it, for now. Though, I admit that this chapter was cute. I had fun writing about Kagai and Sunny playing with Sparky. It was a breath of fresh air.

AltoGuardian: I wonder what the prize is myself. I had an idea, but I forgot and I can’t remember it. I’m sure that I will get another one until it ends, hopefully, because it would suck to have won without receiving the prize. I would look like a liar. Now on with the review response. I think you made it a point that Jen and Kagai are good. I think that everyone reached that conclusion by now. That’s why I like them so much. Rick is stupid for not seeing how much good friends they are. I hope he does before the end of the story. I realize that he is kind of ‘evil’ since a few chapters back, but I think he can be better. Not perfectly good like Jen, but kinda better than : « Get out of my way, I’m Sparktail and I rock ! » It shouldn’t be too hard. And look, it took only one week before the next chapter !

Kirby: Who are you ? You didn’t sign the review and now I’m all confused ! For that. I’m going to sic Jen on you, since Miya is on vacation in Pichu Land. (sic Jen on you) Anyway, Mr. Anonymous, it’s a good thing that you think the chapter is good. If I wish I could play with Kagai and Jen, too… err.. wait.. forget I said anything. Sparktail had to be good to Kagai and Jen, because I threatened him of spending two days in a box without light. (look at chapter 14) Sparky ! You are so going in the box ! (lock him up in there) By the way, I fixed that mistake with the separator. I hate it when it’s cut like that.

P.S. : Yeah, it was hard, but I have seen worse from you at times. Not here, but… you know what I mean, Mr. Anonymous… Eevee. (smirk and turn you into one and then leave you to Jen)

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Before I continue, the plot ninja have a very important message to say.

Plot Ninja : If you haven’t read chapter 14 yet, DO NOT READ THE FOLLOWING TEXT! You have been warned. (poofs away in a screen of smoke)

Hehe… maybe I should have a Plot Pirate, too. They would be having a war and I would get to watch them while eating popcorn.

Oh well, it has been a very long road from Pallet town to the forests south of Mt Moon, but it seems that it’s all over for Jen, Kagai, Sunny and the other pokemon we don’t care about. (sorry, Steamer and Leafty). Since you have taken time to read this, I will reveal to you a little secret: they are not gone from the story forever. They will be back eventually. It will be hard to tolerate Sparky’s selfishness until then, but here’s another little secret: This time alone will affect him in some way, so stay on your toes. I still have plenty of surprises in my bag. I wish I could say more, but the plot Ninjas are watching me, and they kind of scare me.

Oh… I changed the question of the poll. This one is a bit unrelated, but I thought it was funny. Who’s the most evil character? You decide!

Ciao!

-DPL

Thursday, August 14, 2008

Time up

I have finished chapter 18 today and this one too is cliffhanger-ish, but not as much as chapter 17 as a whole. After writing 3 chapters in 6 days, it's time for a pause. I won't write anything for the next two days, but I will post chapter 14 tomorrow. If K.A. has made modifications he wants to keep in the chapter, I want him to send me his version of the chapter before noon tomorrow. If I don't get it before that time, I will use the version I sent him and work on that. I will have the chapter posted by 3PM tomorrow.

Also, I revised chapter 15 today and I made it available for Tyler to proofread. From now on, only the speed of his job will decide of when the next chapter is up. This should make things go faster.

Finally, I want to add that I will change the question of the poll tomorrow, like I promised last week. I want to thank everyone who voted lately. The results of the vote gave no doubt, you all liked Kagai, so much that almost half of the people who voted wanted her to replace Rick. Sadly, this won't happen, but she will have more weight in the story than Sunny did. Err... I mean, that Sunny has.

On a personal note, my wheelchair'd twin brother found a way to hurt his little finger while on vacation and it became infected, so he is at the hospital. He will be fine, but it's still kind of unlucky and I wanted to mention it. Get well, bro!

Ciao!

Public apology

I'm posting a special message this morning to apologize to K.A. and to everyone who read my message last night. I was angry and in my impulsiveness, I posted something out of frustration. In retrospect, it's not K.A.'s fault for accepting this. Everyone can make a mistake. But it was mine to act like a baby and complain for no reason. I knew I shouldn't have done that, but it was so tempting and I had a entry to post, so...

I'm sorry... I know it's probably not worth more than just three but I mean them. K.A. can stop proofreading if he wants. I think I know more than anyone else how much of a pain it is, because I spend hours on each chapter to revise it, so it looks good. If K.A. had seen the original version of that chapter, he wouldn't just have found it tedious, he would have wanted to kill me, like Tyler when he saw it. So... yeah. I know that my English is far from being the best and that I do tons of stupid mistakes that will be hard to fix, because no software can spot them for me, so I can't learn from them. The only thing that can teach me is time. As you saw, chapter 13 is much better than chapter 1 and if I wrote a new chapter in one year from now, it would be better than chapter 13. At least, there is slow and gradual improvement, isn't there?

Anyway... I am still deeply sorry. I would remove the message on my blog, but I don't hide the truth. I will keep it there to remind me how rash and impulsive I can be. Ciao!

Wednesday, August 13, 2008

Stuff

Yeah... I don't feel much like being imaginative with the title, because of some complaining K.A. Anyway... my cough is nearly all gone and I felt much better today. I wrote more than half of chapter 18 today, I cut some wood and I ate meat. Yep... the regular Canadian stuff. I don't have much to say, I feel like I had a lot more, but... whatever... I just don't fee like it anymore... I'm going to go write my chapter and add many, many, many, many,,, unecessary commas. It's going to be fun. Ciao!

Tuesday, August 12, 2008

BAM! Chapter 17 done!

I felt a little better today, but I wrote less. Search me. Oh well... I finished chapter 17 and boy... that chapter ended much differently than what I had expected and with a BAM. A lot happened in that one... I wonder it's like that. Maybe it's sickness that makes me disillusional or something. Anyway... I will start writting 18 tomorrow, then, I will take a break to revise chapter 15, so it can be posted by the end of the month. As for 14, I'm waiting for K.A. and his final proofreading, but it shouldn't be too long. It should be out in a few days. I don't think I have much else to say, so I will go to bed early today. Ciao!

Monday, August 11, 2008

More writting and cough

(cover myself in a warm blanket and cough) Hi... people...

It seems that my sister or my mom gave me their cough, so I have a bad one right now. So, I slept half of the day and I felt bad the other half. Despite how I feel, I sat in front of my computer and wrote. And you know what? I wrote half of chapter 17 and so far, I like it. It's a shame that I can't tell you about it, because, plot wise, it's like the finality of a lot of things. Heck, after finishing the first part of the chapter, I felt like ending the story right there. But, I know that there is still a lot to go, and after writting more of it, I felt like it wasn't over yet.

What else... hmm... yeah... I didn't post anything yesterday, because I finished playing that game with my bro, who left the house today, so I had no internet time. I didn't write anything anyway, but I rewrote the end of chapter 16, so it was more to my liking. It just felt... imcomplete and meh, like I said before, so I fixed that.

That's all I have to say, so ciao!

Saturday, August 9, 2008

Writting and review fest

Hello, people.

Today, I finished writting chapter 16. I think this chapter is meh, as in, the action is cool, but I don't think I wrote it exactly like I wanted to. Oh well, that's why revising is there. I will start chapter 17 tomorrow. In other news, I have send chapter 14 for a final proofreading and I hope K.A. has at least downloaded the document... speaking of chapter 14, I will insert a random teaser, riiiight.... here.

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Kagai, however, didn't care much about his explanations. She was tired and she wanted to get back to sleep. Arguing with the rodent wasn't something fun to do and, if he didn't want to listen to common sense, he could just do whatever he wanted, as long it meant she could sleep again. "Oh Sparky, just go ahead, be stupid and go outside alone. If you happen to get eaten, don't forget to shout my name so I can come help with the eating." she told Sparktail half-jokingly, closing her eyes again.

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Kagai is one big meanie, isn't she? The first one to answer yes to that question, I will hit him or her.

Oh well... I received 6 reviews, by the way. That's cool, I guess. Ciao!

Friday, August 8, 2008

Chapter 13 posted!

OMG! (or any other deity) I posted a new chapter! Yay! I mayu have dragged this blog out of the unknown! Yay! I have apply juice! Yay!

Alright... enough celebrating, let's go to the bulk of the subject. As you probably know by now, I posted chapter 13. And as you also know, It took me 3 months before posting it. Well... this doesn't reflect reality. The true is... I am writting chapter 16 right now, but I can't post them. Why? Because I have problems with my proofreaders and University made it so I didn't have time to organize things to go more fluidly. If you look at the earlier entries of this blog (they have a few goodies, too), you will see that I plan to write the rest of my story during the next month. As of such, this blog will see daily updates about stuff and things, if people participate. I have chapter 14 proofread and I will send it for a final proofreading. If I am lucky, it will be posted within the next week. Also, next Friday, I will change the question of the poll, so you only have one week left to vote on it.

Now that this is behind me, here's the fabled lost Review Response section, for your own enjoyment (and mine)

Foxyjosh: Well... you got it wrong. While it's true that eevee can evolve by happiness, like in the games (the same is true for pichu), I don't have it exactly the same way. A baby pokemon can evolve if they are old enough and really wants it to happen. Usually, it happens through group rituals, but Kagai had it a bit different, as you will see in this chapter. Oh well... nice try anyway.

HelKat: Interesting hypothesis concerning the stuck in the past thing, but it's not her case. At least, it's not what made her evolve. The farmer things isn't true, but isn't entirely false in a way, but doesn't really matter as it comes to her real enemies. But, with those guesses, you win the number 2 spot in my contest. Congratulation! By the way, Umbreon is also one of my favorite pokemon, hence why it is in my story. The real reason for her being there though is because the character have been created long ago, not long after Sparky was made.

Kirby: Stop refreshing my chapter! Nah... it's alright now, since it counts visitors with that new nifty tracking option on FF.net. Jen isn't mad at you for not celebrating her birthday, since she didn't celebrate yours either. Oh... here's Miya! She likes your ice cream. *Miya shrinks you and place you in her ice cream.* Hehe... now... yeah, I don't like gore much either... maybe. Well... I don't feel like responding to all those Post-Pre-Scripts, so I will do an abriged version: (hit you) I was talking about stuff and I sometime get tired too, so you are not alone. Good. Now it seems that I reached the actual review, at long last! *holy music* Let see... yes, I know that fire doesn't need a spark, but I needed some kind of analogy. Yes, Kagai is really cute (pet her). Yes... it's /really/ a shame she's not an espeon, though pichu are /much/ cuter (grin). Well... she was preprared for living in the wild, but was more at the stade of her life where she played games. She was about to learn about the real stuff, but... (the plot ninjas are staring at me) ...anyway... next point. Kagai thinks that everyone is weird, because she's one cynical umbreon, so it doesn't mean Jen is weird because Kagai says she is. No, Kagai doesn't want to be an eevee again. Go play with Thirteen! (read point about Sunny smelling the umbreon's scent.) Err... look, ice cream! (point left and run away to the right) Oh well... thanks for saying my chapter was good! (hug the Kira-you) You know, you were hugging too many people and pokemon at the end of that review. You probably hurt some of them. Oh, by the way, I posted this in one big paragraph because I am evil.

Tyler: Yeah, Magic was cool while she lasted. (skip big paragraph) Now... yeah, the first part was mystic and unrelated. I love to go offtopic, like that time I was at school and that guy asked me a question and I... (ramble for 20 minutes)... so yeah, I love to go offtopic. Yeah... highschool blew up that innocence for me... oh well, not really... but it's still reasonable to feel sorry for Kagai. She had it hard. Gory details are cool. What's wrong with people not liking it? (people stare at me weirdly) Err... yeah, it's going to be fun when those two meet. Though, Kagai personality is not that childish. You should meet Thirteen. That's a real crazy girl. Will we see L and S again? I'm going to answer now: No. They suck and are unimportant anyway. I hope I didn't frustate any reader here. I will try not to take so long with next chapter... oops... I already did. Sorry! Sorry! Sorry!.... Sorry!

AltoGuardian: I wouldn't become an author, because English isn't my first language. Well... I might if I do go live in the USA one day, but until then, nawww... Ok, to the actual response. Well... we have something in common, we don't like Rick. But, I tell you something (since I have written chapter 16), don't hate him yet. Well... yes you can hate him, but not really. I mean... it's kind of hard to explain, but you will see clearer later on. Jen is cool, yes. It's a shame that... (is kidnapped by the plot ninjas again) Plot Ninja: Congratulation for winning the guessing contest. Your prize shall be revealed when the time will come.

Voila! I hope you enjoyed those! Funny enough, I notice that I revealed Kagai's name before I made sure you had read the chapter... oh well... I'm sorry about that. Please leave comments! I will happily reply to them all.

-DPL

Matters of writing and slow internet

Hello again everyone! I know that I said that I would post once a day and that this is my second entry today (or the first of the two tomorrow, take it like you want), but I felt like talking about stuff. I am back from 7 hours of sleep and I feel much better, even though I will go back to sleep soon. In a few hours, the Beiing (I probably screwed up with the spelling, sue me) Olympics Games will start and with it, lot of talk about sport and stuff. Well, I want you to know that I will be able to participate in my own marathon. At the last minute, I decided to bring my computer home, which mean that I have access to a word processor and a computer without Internet, so I can work on it anytime I want, for how much I want. Which mean, you will have guessed it, that I will be able to work on my story and, since that's the only thing that's fun to do here, I will work on it a lot. If I keep this motivation, I might be able to write the rest of the story during this month of reclusion at the heart of the forests in Quebec.

Speaking of writting, I must thanks K.A. again for being so fast on proofreading my chapter (after I had to threaten him for him to do it ;) ). I love the changes you made and I hope readers will like then as much, when I will post it before 5PM today. The next entry shall be posted here at the same time as my chapter and this shall blog finally fulfill its purpose.

On a side note, Internet here is slower than a snail going uphill during windy weather on a frozen and slippy icy floor. I hate it already and it seems to be slower than ever before. To give you an idea, it took me one hour to: check my e-mails, check U website and post here. So, let's all take a minute of silence and think about all the nasty things we could do to dial-up Internet if it was a physical entity.

(10 seconds later)

Ok... bad thoughts right there, so I'm going to stop. Oh well... bye!

Thursday, August 7, 2008

All-Nighter, Vacation and whatever...

Hi, people!

I am returned from school, the place where reports are written and security is pain and night are sleepless. Well... guess what?? I'm not coming back there until next Jenuary! Yay! Now, I today went to my workplace to get the time I will start working and it will be September 2nd, so I will be away from Skype much longer than expected, but it's ok, because I will be here, in this blog. I also went to the store to buy a Blueteeth card for blue teeth applications, so I can work on my secret project thingy. Yay!

Err... oh, and K.A., I REALLY want that chapter soon. I dunno... ask Kirby to motivate you or something. I want it done by Saturday. I will remind you everyday until I have received it as a PM or in a e-mail. Ok? It's getting rediculous. Also, it would be nice if F.D. came here to say hi, once in a while. I dunno if he knows this place exists, but whatever... it would be nice too. Err... I think that's all I had to say. Soory for horrible grammar. Brain is kinda deady.

Cya for today and return tomorrow for another entry of this blog place.

Ciao!

Wednesday, August 6, 2008

Welcome!

Welcome to my new home! Well... this place is nothing new, I admit, but for the next two or three weeks, it will be the only place I will have access to, so I'm making it my new base of operation. Most of the things I will post won't have anything to do with my story, but whatever... it's my blog and I do whatever I want with it. Today, I pretty much have nothing else to say, but I probably will have something to talk about tomorrow.

On a side note, I am working on a new personal project. I gathered some of the material I need today at my University electronic equipment depot. I will need a few more things, but I will have to go to an electronic store for that. What is this project about? You will know in time.

It seems that I did have something to talk about. Oh well... see ya!

Tuesday, August 5, 2008

Finally...

Finals are over!!! Yay! Now, it's beer time... err... I mean... I'm going to go home and calmly go back to writing my story... while drinking alchoolized drinks. Well... half the bottle remaining in my dorm, because I can't leave it there and I can't move it from there, because the top is broken. So, either I throw it away, I put it in a sealing container or I drink it. Since I don't like to waste things and that I don't have a sealing container, I'm going to drink those 5 oz of beer. Yay for being cheap!

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To my defense, I'm not going to touch the 3 unopened beers in my fridge. I think my mom will like to have those. So, it makes a gift... yay for being cheap again!

EDIT: Well... I did not write my story... but I drank that evil drink of the devil, so now, at least I'm free of seeing that thing waste itself in the fridge. I'm not too proud of myself, but, I think I was too tired to write my story anyway. I will give another shot at it tomorrow. For now... sleepy time! (go in sleepy world)

Monday, August 4, 2008

Pichu!

I'm in a pichu mood and people were doing this, so...

1. What is your character's name?

Miya

2. What is your character's name in another language?

Chupii (What? Pichu have their language...)

3. How old is he/she?

Depends. A few months as a pichu, though she has been seen to be a teen or a child in some places.

4. What is your character's race/species?

Pichu

5. Do they have a crush?

No, though she likes a pichu named Jolt.

6. Do they have many friends?

A few, but other pichu are, according to her, "stupid".

7. What planet is your character from?

Earth. (though one could say Pokemon World, I guess)

8. Does your character like to eat?

Yes, a lot, especially if she's around apples.

9. What's his/her favorite food?

Apple

10. What's his/her favorite drink?

Her mother's milk.

11. Is your character annoying?

She can be when she's being playful

13. Is your character loved?

By other pichu, yes. By her parents, yes. But you are a predator, you probably don't like her. She messed up.

14. Is your character hated?

Hating a pichu?

15. Is she/he emo/goth?

She can be sad because of her gift and the pain it can be at times, but otherwise, she's cheerful, like any other pichu.

16. Is she/he straight, bisexual, or gay?

Straight. I didn't see a gay pokemon yet.

17. Is she/he a virgin?

...she's a child...

18. Name 3 hobbies:

Playing, eating and being mishevious with her psychic powers

19. Is your character normal?

A psychic pichu with more power than the average human gifted individul? Hardly normal.

20. Is your character attractive?

I would say, cute.

21. How does your character handle emotions?

She can, most of the time, as required by the control of her gift. She can lose it at times, but it will be more like sadness about how different she is from the other pichu.

22. Does your character have other forms?

Maybe...

23. Does your character overreact?

Being a pichu, overreacting kinda defines what she is. Everything around her is something special.

24. Is your character a criminal?

Some may say she is. She does steal knowledge from other, even if she knows it's bad.

26. What's his/her IQ?

Close to the average human's (which makes her a genius among pichu)

27. Does your character have a disease/curse?

She's gifted and with very little in a pichu body to control it.

28. Is your character dead?

...

29. Does your character have a family?

Yup. Her parents are-- (is kinapped by the plot ninjas)

30. Has he/she encountered any tragic times in life?

I'm not sure... maybe learning to control her gift. She was outcasted for being weird and that wasn't fun.

31. What's the best time in your character's life?

About... now, since she's an innocent pichu.

32. If you could name 1 friend, which would you relate to your character?

I would says Ramira, for the cheerfulness, but even there, it's not really close.

33. Is your character single?

Again, she's a pichu!

34. Has he/she developed any relationships?

Pichu!

35. Does he/she have an element?

Electricity? Duh!

36. Do you roleplay your character?

Yes!

37. Do you write about your character?

Maybe...

38. Does your character have a bad temper at times?

Being a child, she can be impatient at times.

39. Does your character get depressed?

It happened before, but like I said, it's more like sadness.

40. What's your characters favorite animal?

Pikachu. She wants to be one.

41. Does your character have any fears?

She's scared of that hole in a nearby tree... but seriously, not really.

42. Does your character have any weaknesses?

Her gift and and naivety.

43. Does your character look up to anyone?

Her father and her mother.

44. Does your character like music?

Yes.

45. What's your character's favorite type of music?

Chu tribal songs.

46. Is he/she impatient?

Yes, I believe I mentioned that already.

47. What's something funny about your character?

She's cute, innocent looking, but she can be powerful and deadly. I think it's funny.

48. Name 5 nicknames

5? Err...

49. Does your character curse?

Is "Awwww...." cursing?

50. This test is over, what does your character have to say?

Awww.... I was having fun... (sees a friend) Yay! (runs to him/her)

Friday, August 1, 2008

Feeling better, but tired... and I've got cake!

Somehow, I got through this evil week alive. I guess it means that I am a survivor... or something. While today's Final probably killed my A+ (though I may still get an A), I think I fared fairly well despite the special circumstances making me nervous and stressed (and don't get me started about nightmares...) So, in celebration, I will eat this imaginary cake from Kirby's birthday. (eat cake) Mmmm... this cake may be a lie, but it tastes great. I think I will put the rest here for people to have a share. Speaking of sharing, I think I shared chapter 13 with K.A. for a last proofreading using his TTS thingy. I wonder if he is done with that. I would like to at least have that posted before I leave home in a few days. It's a bit unfair that people are waiting for months, while I am writing chapter 16... (eat some more cake)